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i.

in a dim and exhausted new york subway train - i
surrender my fingerprints over to dirty railings and
start over.


ii.

my body stretches like a mayan temple over his landscape.
my sun drags itself across his skies to his brutal moon
prowling the outskirts of our madness. he says

bend yourself to these sights, love.
recognize, but never accept.
i want your filthy and bruised hope
on my table. he was

saturating space, says - how much
do you love your world. eyes screaming
alive over and over again. you can do better

he says, but you want to do worse.

iii.

a giraffe crawls out of my dead skin and is silent,
but stares with fat-sky eyes. its tongue snakes
and wraps around my wrists, shakes me
in a language that says my pores
are clogged and taste like
Africa and Ireland:
magic and desperation.

iv.

welcome
he says.
full title: "to my former self - sinister is beautiful"

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:icontommyboywood:
tommyboywood Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So... when the giraffe crawled out if your skin, did it hurt?  Oh wait!  Dead skin, right.  But then...
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jessicaconk Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I was powerless to stop reading as soon as the first line hit. Marvelous. :hug:
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2009
:blowkiss:!
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:iconclipitswings:
ClipItsWings Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009  Student General Artist
I quite like this :)
(and I have wonder if you know if this type of poetry has a name, and could you please tell me if you do know?)
Congrats on the dd btw
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
Type of poetry? If you're talking what I think you're talking, then nope - no..."type", just a lot of raw words and raw structures that mean whatever you want them to mean. Formality scares me :fear:

Thank you so very much :heart:
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:iconclipitswings:
ClipItsWings Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009  Student General Artist
haha :meow: alright, because I've seen somewhat similar writings but I wasn't sure if it was more complex than I thought. either way, fabulous work.

And of course ^ ^
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
Well, I don't believe any specified "type" defines the complexity of a poem, but interpret as you like! :heart:
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:iconedibility:
edibility Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009  Hobbyist
Really love this.....
Have to ask though...why Africa and Ireland?
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
You tell me ;)
But thank you oh so much, loverly! :heart:
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edibility Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009  Hobbyist
I don't know....in my mind Africa is magic and Ireland is desperation, but I'm Irish, and one rarely reflects accurately on their own country. Giraffes are African and snakes have a metaphorical link to Ireland.....hrmmm. Probably over thinking it really....but anyway.

Like I said, love it :)
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:iconalmcdermid:
almcdermid Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
"i want your filthy and bruised hope
on my table." <- Stunning!

And the rest is just so imaginative. Well-done and well-deserved. Congratulations.
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:iconcaroncecilia:
CaronCecilia Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
CONGRATS!!!! you deserve it!!!! you are definitely one of my top favorite artists to watch!!!
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
Ahhh, stop it :) You'll make me melt
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:icontheforc:
theforc Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
I don't get it, but I definitely enjoyed reading it. :)
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
:heart:!!!

You're the only sane one for miles!
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:icontheforc:
theforc Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
I think I may just be a different kind of crazy. I'm not much of an artistic man, unless you call the sciences an art, but if you don't then you'd be saying god is not an artist. Or that chaos isn't an artist, and I think chaos is a part of art....
I'm about to get very confused.
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
Oops wait, you are one of us! :heart:

It's not so bad here though
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:icontheforc:
theforc Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
Not at all! That's why I love being classified here. If something happened and we were all segregated, I don't know if I could stand being anywhere else. Except perhaps Alaska.
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TaintedAngelTears Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
This is truly thought provoking. Great work.
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
:kiss:!
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winter-songs Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Student Writer
I keep rereading this and I can't believe it. So much room for interpretation and so much beauty.

I think ii is my favorite.

This is so beautiful.
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
:heart:
so much love for this comment, thank you :)
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:iconbones-of-opal:
Bones-Of-Opal Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009   Writer
You inspire me.

I loved reading this.
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
Words I want to live for<3

Thank you :)
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:iconcursedarchangels:
CursedArchangels Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
I've been wanting to write something to my former self, I'm so unlike her now...


Very moving and descriptive, congrats on the DD!
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
Thank you so very much!
If it means anything,

gogogogo write her, slap her, hug her.
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:iconcursedarchangels:
CursedArchangels Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
haha will do, eventually
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akatsukixwannaxbe Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
If there are words to describe this, I know them not.
All I can say is this is brilliant, well written, and I honestly love it.
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
Dawwh :heart:
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akatsukixwannaxbe Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
:heart:
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TwistedSeason Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
Really enjoyed reading this! :)
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
:heart:! :)
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:icontwistedseason:
TwistedSeason Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
:hug:
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mariecobain Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Student Writer
Lovely....
Somewhat abstract and very profound. Great style :D
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
:flirty:

:heart:!
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choirsoftheheavens Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Student Writer
this is amazing. it's rich with all the imagery a starving writer needs, and huge with delicious emotions, absolute accurate word choices and some really nicely said portions that I want to cut out and keep in my pocket.
:heart: congrats on the dd.
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
:tighthug: YES :heart:!!

and (thank you, very much. :))
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:iconchoirsoftheheavens:
choirsoftheheavens Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009  Student Writer
:hug: and (you're welcome)
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009   Writer
very desirable words, which you use to create such a desperate need.

:heart::heart::heart:
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
:heart::heart::heart:...:heart:!
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:iconl-i-v-i:
L-I-V-I Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
Truly Brilliant.
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
Thanks very much :heart:
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skinunderneath Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
i love this so much. unbelievable.
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
thank you! :)
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baby-filly Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009   Writer
my body stretches like a mayan temple over his landscape.
my sun drags itself across his skies to his brutal moon
prowling the outskirts of our madness


I loved these lines so much, as I loved the rest of the poem. Congratulations on the DD, you truly do deserve it. :heart: :)
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
Thank you very much, :)!
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Radical-Minds Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009   Photographer
Dark :blackrose: I love it!
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
:flirty:
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:iconlogosatum:
LogosAtum Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Great
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