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i.

in a dim and exhausted new york subway train - i
surrender my fingerprints over to dirty railings and
start over.


ii.

my body stretches like a mayan temple over his landscape.
my sun drags itself across his skies to his brutal moon
prowling the outskirts of our madness. he says

bend yourself to these sights, love.
recognize, but never accept.
i want your filthy and bruised hope
on my table. he was

saturating space, says - how much
do you love your world. eyes screaming
alive over and over again. you can do better

he says, but you want to do worse.

iii.

a giraffe crawls out of my dead skin and is silent,
but stares with fat-sky eyes. its tongue snakes
and wraps around my wrists, shakes me
in a language that says my pores
are clogged and taste like
Africa and Ireland:
magic and desperation.

iv.

welcome
he says.
full title: "to my former self - sinister is beautiful"

!
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jessicaconk Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I was powerless to stop reading as soon as the first line hit. Marvelous. :hug:
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Aadea Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2009
:blowkiss:!
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ClipItsWings Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
I quite like this :)
(and I have wonder if you know if this type of poetry has a name, and could you please tell me if you do know?)
Congrats on the dd btw
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Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
Type of poetry? If you're talking what I think you're talking, then nope - no..."type", just a lot of raw words and raw structures that mean whatever you want them to mean. Formality scares me :fear:

Thank you so very much :heart:
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:iconclipitswings:
ClipItsWings Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
haha :meow: alright, because I've seen somewhat similar writings but I wasn't sure if it was more complex than I thought. either way, fabulous work.

And of course ^ ^
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Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009
Well, I don't believe any specified "type" defines the complexity of a poem, but interpret as you like! :heart:
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edibility Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009  Hobbyist
Really love this.....
Have to ask though...why Africa and Ireland?
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:iconaadea:
Aadea Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
You tell me ;)
But thank you oh so much, loverly! :heart:
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edibility Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009  Hobbyist
I don't know....in my mind Africa is magic and Ireland is desperation, but I'm Irish, and one rarely reflects accurately on their own country. Giraffes are African and snakes have a metaphorical link to Ireland.....hrmmm. Probably over thinking it really....but anyway.

Like I said, love it :)
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almcdermid Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
"i want your filthy and bruised hope
on my table." <- Stunning!

And the rest is just so imaginative. Well-done and well-deserved. Congratulations.
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